<3 - Bale Vandergrief
For the Written Revolution:
1) What are this piece's strengths and weaknesses?
2) What could be changed to make it stronger and more profound?
3) Is there a sense of originality or is this piece pretty cliche in your eyes?
4) Does the structural format suit it (broken into stanzas)?
5) What feelings does this piece manage to evoke from you?
My critique: [link]